Moving on.
Hi everyone, I finally finished my post on Juicing Health Benefits, please check it out and leave me a comment.
Thanks everybody for all the encouragement and help thus far. I truly appreciate ya all.
Here is the link to the post.
http://acidicbodynomore.com/juicing-health-benefits
Thanks again, and God Bless.
Tina
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I can only reflect what Craig and en have observed...too much information can be a turn-off in this age of quick single-cause answers seem to be the only worthwhile media...remember that "Brevity is the Soul of Wit" from Shakespeare...
I got, and like I said I agree after looking at it again. I will let you all know when it is fixed and, like asked both of them, please check it out and let me know if you like better.
God Bless and good night.
Tina (nana55)
Hello again, AG, please take another look at the post, I did a little revamping and I think it helped a lot. Let me know what you think now, please.
http://acidicbodynomore.com/juicing-health-benefits
Good night, God bless and much success to you on your journey here at WA.
Tina
Thank you, AG. I do now too. Thanks for the advice. It helped a lot. Have a great and fun WA day.
Tina
Hi there.
I don't want to discourage you, but I will agree with BenORourke. Seeing a wall of text tends to turn people away. It would be great for you to add some images.
I know that you really want to pass along the information about tomatoes, but I think it would be better to give your own overview of their benefits and a link to the original article.
I too, agree. I am gonna go fix it. I just went and looked and it looks funky like it is right now. I will let you all know when I get it fixed and hopefully, you all can let me know it looks better. Thank you guys for being honest. I love it and appreciate it.
Thanks again and God bless.
Tina (nana55)
Hello, Craig. You did not discourage me, rather you encouraged me to take another look. Could you please check it out again and let me know what you think?
http://acidicbodynomore.com/juicing-health-benefits
God bless, good night and much success on your journey here at WA.
Tina
Much nicer! You must also see a difference yourself. It looks more readable and has more visual "pop."
A few things though: I would still try to break up your paragraphs a bit. Your first paragraph, for example, could easily be split into three, which would facilitate easy reading. A large block of text often has the effect of turning people away, as it looks a bit overwhelming.
There are a couple of little errors, mostly nitpicky ones like spelling and grammar, but a fairly obvious one is the end of the first paragraph, where you have an incomplete sentence.
If you want more detail, I can give it, but you should find most of the little issues by simply re-reading it as if you were visiting your own site for the first time.
Overall, I think it's a bit improvement. Great job!
I also left a quick comment on-site.
Hi. A lot of information there. You need to break up your text into smaller paragraphs and include some images.
And to be brutally honest with you the post will never rank. You need to write your own content. It is duplicate content which already ranks in search engines.
Check this site for instance:
https://healthimpactnews.com/2014/20-amazing-health-benefits-of-tomatoes-that-should-make-them-a-daily-staple-in-your-diet/
Thank you so much and please ALWAYS be "brutally honest" with me, I am trying to get ranked not lost in the mix.
I truly appreciate it and I will check out the site for a guide to better writing. I will go back and change the "tomato" part since I am pretty sure that is what you are referring to right? Is that the only part? If not let me know what else you are talking about, please. For the most part, I do write my own content, I just thought that that was pretty important and wanted it all in there. I can re-write in my own words though and that is what I will do.
Again thanks for the honesty.
God Bless and stay in touch okay?
Tina (nana55)
Hi, Tina. Yes, just the tomato part. You need to make it unique. About 30% of the post is related to the tomato part so try to change it around a bit.
There are also a lot of outbound links leading away from your site in the tomato section.
Hello, Ben. Please take another look at my post, I went back and re-worked it. I like much better now. Thanks for the criticism, it helped a lot. Keep it coming.
http://acidicbodynomore.com/juicing-health-benefits
I look forward to hearing back from you.
Good night, God bless and much success on your journey here at WA.
Tina
It is getting there Tina!
Your paragraphs are still a little long, though. Have a look at a post on Kyle's site for example.
http://waystoavoidscamsonline.com/is-a-0-99-domain-really-a-0-99-domain-uncovering-the-marketing-scheme
Three to five lines for most of the paragraphs. Easy to read and skim.
From 'sweet potatoes' on could actually be another post in itself.
What do you think?
Hi Tina, as my niche is health as well I found your post particularly interesting. I'm still awaiting my site feedback on livewellwithmark.com so feel free to check it out. I read all of your article and I wondered if you could include a few more pictures, images to 'juice' it up. Also, and I'm a relative newbie here, maybe some info graphics could reduce the word density and break the paragraphs up a bit. I'll have a look at the rest of the site and other posts too when I get the time as it really interests me. Well done.#
Mark
I will check it out tomorrow for you and leave a comment for you. I am going to redo that post as I have to much text, not enough pictures and need to put the tomato part in my own words instead of quoting someone else.
Thanks for the feedback and look for mine on your site tomorrow.
Goodnight and God Bless.
Tina (nana55)
Hi, Mark. I went back and took your advice, please check it out again and let me know what you think.
http://acidicbodynomore.com/juicing-health-benefits
Let me know, okay?
Good night and God bless.
Tina
Hi Tina, I am going to start buying some organic tomato juice after reading your site and hopefully buy a decent juicer when I start making some money on my WA site! I think the photos have definitely added value to your site, but echo the comments about it being a bit wordy - I loved it as I'm a health geek and I'm sure you'll attract many like me to your site. Maybe you could break up the wordy aspect by including a read more function to another post on your site, rather than click off site. This would allow you to pack in all your health benefits in a shorter paragraph backed up by the scientific evidence within another post/page on your site. Also maybe you could add some nice picture of juices and the process of juicing to whet people's appetites. Love the content though and I definitely want to de-alkalize my system, so please post me any further developments on your site. All the best and keep up the good work.#
Mark
Thanks for the GREAT advice on how to make it less "wordy" I kept thinking about that and for some unknown reason got stuck on it and haven't been able to move forward. You just gave me the KEY!! By the way, you don't want to de-alkalize your system you want to de-acidify your system, (Smile).
I will let you know when I make some more progress and add some new info.
Thanks again, and stay in touch, k.
God bless.
Tina (nana55)
I just plucked de-alkalize out of the air so thanks for the correction - I'm an English teacher too! ;) I will definitely keep in touch and may well link to your site with my future posts on health. I've bought some tomato juice by the way.
Take care and god bless.
Mark
Great and please do link to my site with your future posts on health, that would be great. I had to smile when I read your post. Thanks for the reply, and stay in touch, okay?
Best wishes and God bless.
Tina
Thank you, I appreciate it. Got clean it up a bit though, so if you feel like check it out again in a few days.
Thanks again, goodnight and God bless.
Tina (nana55)
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Hello Theresa, I enjoyed the content of the post and left a comment there. My only suggestions are to break the content up into perhaps three posts, veggies, fruits and review. It is a little too long currently and if you are a just a curious visitor you may not stay long because of the length. Also you should add some images to compliment the text. Being in the fitness business and coaching athletes, I found it informational, thank you.
That is a consensus and I am going to fix it, I agree, it looks horrible and is hard to stay interested like that.
Thank you too, God Bless and look for the "I fixed it post" when it is done.
God Bless and good night.
Tina (nana55)
It does not look horrible but it can be improved. I find a lot of people at Wealthy Affiliate (WA), tend to write very long posts rather than break up the topic. Do not know why but people tend to lose interest if it goes on too long.
Hi Harvey, I finished the update on the post you reviewed for me. Please check it out again, okay?
http://acidicbodynomore.com/juicing-health-benefits
Let me know what you think now, please.
God bless, good night and much success on your journey.
Tina
Much better with the images, but I still find it a tad too long. I think you could easily get two to three posts out of what you have.