Your insight is Needed
As you all know by now my grammar needs work and I kind of rely on your opinion and your understanding to get better . Lately I have written a post for every lessons of my level 3 training and I would really appreciate you thoughts on some of them they are the first thing you see on my website . Here is the link http://computerinreview.com/ thank you for your cooperation .
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I really like the way you write. The text flows and your comments seem to come from someone who is enthusiastic, knowledgeable and keen. Your grammar needs a touch of tweaking but I wouldn't be overly concerned about that right now. We won't be calling the grammar police. I agree with the others on the style and left alignment. You've got soul; keep up the good work.
Your grammar is fine for the most part. I would echo comments made below and add in that text needs bullet pointing and left alignment is best- otherwise the eyes and brain have to work too hard.
gadget should be gadgets (plural as we love more than one gadget)
I am in favor of annotating images you can then continue the train of thought- headline/sub-headline/bullet points/image caption etc.
You are consistently striving and you will nail it for sure, Andy
Hi Louis
I've had a look. I don't think your grammar has as many problems as you think it is and it's certainly not the thing that I would look at in this article. Here are couple of things you might want to think about.
1) The images are far too small and not very well placed. See why it's important https://my.wealthyaffiliate.com/bis/blog/tips-for-making-your-website-images-count-infographic
If you have images left aligned they will break up the text and make it difficult for readers to read. You also haven't enough space around them Have a look at this https://my.wealthyaffiliate.com/training/working-with-images-in-wordpress-posts
2)Content matching the headline. Your title is Are Smart Phones Different Cellphones. (Should read 'From' cellphones). The problem is that apart from giving a long definition from Wikipedia (which in my view is far too long) - you then don't go on yourself to say anything about the difference. It's really important to make sure that your content reflects the headline or your readers will be disappointed.
:) Beverley
thank you so much this is the kind of help I really need ... you see the title " Are Smart Phones Different Cellphones " was a keyword phrase i tried to incorporate in my website .... such was my homework from lesson 3 -7 .... the thing is i should of never tried to use that . thanks for the links I will have a look
Louis, I am always mightily impressed by what Beverly has to say, it is so considered and thought-through. I fully endorse what she says, and have made separate comment on some elements. Andy
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'How do smartphones DIFFERS from cellphones'. This is the first one that I noticed. Remove the 'S' from the word DIFFERS. And also, the title 'Why Buy Notebooks over Laptops', it appears that you prefer notebooks over laptops, but when reading your blog, you're just actually telling the difference between the two. You may change the title to 'Notebooks vs. Laptops', or anything to that effect. Just my view. Otherwise, you've got a great looking very friendly-user website, easy to navigate. Well done.
Thank you for replying !You 're right going to fix it right away, thank you!