Website feedback needed

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byJDE
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My website is up,

http://campingfundamentals.com/

And I am Writing, writing, writing. I am afraid the content is getting long winded but I am having a great time with it. If anyone reads this, please take a second and take a look at the site. I have only published content under Home and the two associated sub menus, along with about me and privacy. Please give me some feedback on the content and the site layout or whatever strikes you. Thanks!

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Hello JDE I visited your site and looks really good to me however I am new at this building websites and marketing. I am interested in camping and thought your site was helpful and I will check it out some more in the future.

Hi Jeff. There are a few things: Firstly, there's a typo in your heading on the home page, "Caming"; your Privacy Policy is still named with your old siterubix site address; there is a need for a bit of an edit and proofread. For example, when you say:

"Camping with your family is a very rewarding pastime. A lot of the benefit is self evident. Enriching relationships, time, peace, and simplicity are a few. The pace of modern life reveals blessings in the camping adventure that might not be as apparent. Unplugging and disconnecting from the Mega-Data delivered by our electronics is one. Another is the fact that the skills and virtually all of the equipment you need to take your family camping are extremely useful during emergencies and natural disasters."

It could be a lot simpler, particularly for a web reader. So you might say:

"Camping with the family is rewarding in so many ways: finally grabbing some time together to live a simple life, in a peaceful environment, away from the fast pace of the data-driven world we all seem to live in. Delightful!

There's also something reassuring in knowing that if civilisation stopped dead tomorrow morning, you'll have all you need to survive right there in your under-bunk storage: primus stove, water, and of course bacon. Loads of bacon. And you get to share it with your favourite people!"

OK, you don't need the bacon bit. But what I'm trying to say is that you're over-writing. What I've tried to do (in a bit of a rush) is take the main points of your paragraph and condense them into fewer sentences, then add a human touch. Overall, the length of the piece has remained about the same, but arguably there's a less Wiki feel about it. It's not about facts, it's about feelings, so appeal to the reader's emotions.

Apart from the feel of the writing, the site itself looks great, although out of the three possible ways of spelling tipi, tepee or teepee, you've managed to find a fourth way, tee-pee! So you need to lose the hyphen.

The structure looks great and I look forward to seeing those pages filled in. You've done a lot more than most in terms of planning your site and it looks like it might become a resource.

Thank you very much for the feedback. I appreciate the input. I need a little more brevity, and loosen up a little. As well as a good proof read! Thanks again.

And you are correct.... Loads of Bacon.

Hello I am new to WA and as i navigate through the training and the post that others leave. It makes me excited to keep going not to give up because there is so much help here at WA. I really like your post. And we all make typing errors even the best.

Hey Jeff. I'd also recommend adding your site to https://my.wealthyaffiliate.com/getting-started/please-give-me-feedback-on-my-website as this is where Members are actively offering and asking for feedback. ) Rich.

Thanks so much.

Make that home and the THREE associated sub menus

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