Hi Myles and thanks for the follow. Like your site and left a comment. Many blessings and much success!

Hi Myles, I'll post my comments here, although I did see your request on the main site that Rich mentions. It really is a matter of luck whether anyone sees your request, wherever you post it - some get lost, buried and forgotten.

Myles, you are a powerhouse, you have only just recently started with WA and you have come such a looong way!

First, may I suggest that you have your 'About the Site' as your welcoming opening page (a Home page). I, and I think many people, like to find out what the site is about before poking around any further.
One of Kyle's recommendations was to have an About Me page because people like to know who they are dealing with. You have a nice photo of yourself on your WA profile - you can use that. Talk about why you chose this particular niche and any relevant experiences you may have (eg. you have a wife and 12 daughters).

Love your Free Gift story, that helps to personalise your site. Are you going to include some craft ideas and links at a later stage? You won't make any money, but it adds good will. Here's one glaring error on that page - "Hoping to here from you soon!" Don't you mean 'hear'?
I noticed a few other tiny mistakes, picky stuff - I suggest you read through slowly, read aloud and focus on each word.
Good luck Myles, you are off to a great start!

I'd also recommend you add your site to https://my.wealthyaffiliate.com/getting-started/please-give-me-feedback-on-my-website if you haven't already done so, as Members there are actively looking to give and receive feedback. :) Rich.