About me

Last Update: November 13, 2014

Ok so I did some changes to the About Me, and was wondering how does it look to you?

Is it too formal? Too informal? Too much? :\

http://leemcking.sg/about-me

Cheers!

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Gordi Premium
I like your website. Simple, clean, and easy to read. Left you a comment
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Kcm Premium
thanks!
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Maxiam59 Premium
left a comment on your site and shared it all the best
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Kcm Premium
thanks!
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nathanpall99 Premium
Hey McKing - great page and great site - really well laid out and clean. I think you have the tone of the page just right - not too formal and not too informal. Really interesting topic too. I found the odd grammatical thing in there (we all have them!) so thought I'd point those out so you were able to correct them (some readers can be fussy with this).

"Some of these areas happens to be my interest" this should say happen instead of happens

"dwindle quite a fair bit" I would say either 'dwindle quite a bit' or 'dwindle a fair bit' but not both

"I would never have thought that I will pick this skill up" change the will to would

And one last thing which isn't a grammar thing but just something that I would word differently - you say "However, I will only be certified in 2015." I would frame this in a more positive way like "I will become certified in 2015" or "I will become a Master Practitioner in Hypnotherapy in 2015". Not sure if they call the Hypnotherapist a master practitioner like with your NLP or numerology but the point is I would frame as a positive - but that is up to you of course!

Those are only small details. Overall it's great and the whole site is awesome. Keep up the good work!
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Kcm Premium
Hahah well, that's what I get for rushing through :P

Although I will leave the only there (cause i want to be certified now :P)

Thanks though!
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