Does it hurt to hear the truth?

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I say no it does not, in fact it can put you back a few steps. (to be truthful).

So I feel I am ready to hear the truth about my hard work. (8hrs 22 drafts later).

Please let me know about my latest post "Holiday BBQ Ideas". www.yourprivateoasis.com

Thanks to all who comments.

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I love your idea of rhyming to make you want to read further! I think it needs a little more proof-reading. It could also use more physical attraction. Other than that, very catchy!

I love your attitude! I can be very blunt in my critiques, but I love getting the same back from others (I've dealt with enough editors over the years to not get my feelings hurt). Your headline is clickable, but it goes to a "page not found" error. I would say "click the photo" rather than "click here" for your affiliate link. Better yet, I'd work it into the text, like, " This is one of my favorite grills. Click the photo to learn more about it on Amazon." If you can give reasons why you like or recommend it, all the better.

That's what I am talking about, love the advice. I will edit it and use the advice. Great! love it! Thank you so much ...I am very blunt person and sometimes the people around me can't handle the truth. (lol famous line.) Happy Holidays

HI, here is my two ( newbie) cents :-) I would also suggest a little color, maybe a image or two more. The ones you have could be a little bigger. And have them line up together, either both to the right or both to the left. Instead of having all of them roll down your page ( I don't know if I'm right on this, but as a reader it is too long) I would leave the new post, but get rid of the other posts and just have the links as you do on the menu. I could be wrong about that, its just an opinion. A little splash of color / images on the other pages as well, not a lot, I also like white space and a site that is not too overwhelming. The tittle that is in blue at the top"Holiday BBQ Ideas" is clickable but also brings you to an error page, you might want to unlink that or have it go somewhere :-) hope this didn't hurt/ helped a little bit.

Hi Danny
I think you need to sort out your images. They are lost in the text.

I really like your 'post' but if I'm honest I found the layout annoying, because it reads like a poem, but it isn't laid out like one -so that made it harder to read.

Beverley

Thank you Beverley, I wanted it to flow better, should I break up the sentences a little more. My wife read it and she had trouble the first time. Any suggestion would help. Thanks

Uhm - that's not an easy one to answer because it's not a poem and that's my slight problem with it. It's a hybrid. I like it but I don't think it's easy to read. Most people want to skim read and you can't do that with yours . There's nothing wrong with doing something different, but if your readers can't read it easily (and you wife couldn't either) - I would say you have a problem.

Beverley

Hello, Beverley
If you get a chance would you look at my website again. I changed the post a little, see if it's better. Thanks for your time.
Danny

Much, much better. I can now read it much more easily. Now the images ....

I think have the same theme as you,so check out my site you might get ideas for size of graphics or colours. Contents are interesting. www.meditation4you.com Any suggestions fron you would be welcome.Good luck! Jack

Will do Jack, I got a lot on plate but you are now on the list of things to do today. Get back to you later today

Hi Danny, I like your use of white space, but I think a little more color or better still the leafy background band at the top a little wider. Maybe one of your festive occasion pictures. I also would think your pictures could be a little larger. I could be wrong, but I don't think the tools are the object. I think people want the good times in their back yard patio. I am a very visual person, and when I see a festive picture like those I am seeing the possibilities. Once I see your vision in my patio then I look at the tools to make it happen. I think you choice of 'Your Private Oasis', is pure genius. Excellent! Just my 2¢.

Thank you very much for all your advice. All you have said I am still working on, but I know it's going in the right direction. Thanks

I like it. Could having abbreviated posts on the homepage be better? like this: myglutenfreestory.com

really don't see why not if one is curious they will go one step further ....nice approach

Very nice and easy going.

Great post. Quite engaging and you have the affiliate links in the right places. However, that same post is returning a 404 page whenever I click on the title so maybe you want to perform a check on that.

Please, tell more about this 404 ? Not sure what that means, could you please help with this? Or direct me to where or whom I can find more on this... Thanks

A 404 an error page. I suggest you delete the post and repost it to fix the problem. Let me know if it works.

Pleasant read...enjoyed it very much.

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