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Wanted to share my about me page and see what you guys think. Is it ok? or what else should it be added in your opinions. Please visit my about me page at the site socceraccesory.siterubix.com

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Thanks everyone, I will put every advice to use. Im not a very talented writer so your help is really a big boost for me.

Hi

Ok the content is interesting which is good, but to add polish to your page, this what I would do, allowing your reader to easily engage with every aspect of your About page content.

1) Make sure to keep each paragraph 4 lines - I know you have 6 or 2 lines in some paragraphs but this will tidy it up and makes reading easier (don't want to give the reader the impression of reading a book.

2) Heading Cues - I find most About pages boring not by the content but by the structured information provided.
When changing a subject within each paragraph just head it with a cue of what the Paragraph/s is about - gives a reader insight of what that paragraph is about.
So it would go something like this:

So who is Omar?
- paragraph/s

Why did I build this Website?
- Paragraph/s

Share your Experience with us.
- Paragraph/s

If you have any keywords - you can also include this within your cue heading and then within your content

Hope this helps - other than that well done on your progress - Colin

You need to break up the text in to smaller parts say 3 to 4 lines it will be easier to read. Add images especially your own it helps to build trust. Overall not a bad start, not keen on the header image by the way

Wow, looks great! I would add a small photo of you on it for a personal touch. They do like to see who they are dealing with. :) If you had a soccer pic of you, that would be awesome (I think).

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