hi! im relatively new here myself and just posted my first squidoo as well when i noticed your blog on gaming computers. i cant help but recomend you put the ASUS G50vt laptop on your site. its the rig i currently use and i have to say its the best gaming laptop out there for under a grand. If ud like i could maybe right a review or something lol. Best of luck out there :)

I cleaned up a few things for you below. Overall, I am new and it is a good start. I feel that it might help if you add a little more meat to why it would be a good computer for gaming such as speed, harddrive, ram and why it is important to look for those things in a gaming rig.

"Now I know what you are thinking, why not an Alienware Gaming Computer? Well my experience with them is not a good one. The gaming rig would crash when I was in a intense battle or even doing the something simple. Customer Support was no help to me!! I tried everything to fix it myself, which I did. I replaced most to the hardware out of the case which became a totally different rig when I bought it.

In my personal opinion, iBuypower gaming rigs are one of best rig that I have come across. With their customization and flexibility in building your own rig, if you have the cash and want a high-power gaming rig, iBuypower is where it is AT!!"

Thz for the info!! And i will look over the grammar and rewrite the article to the best of my ability. I love the info that you have give me!

Great job on finishing a lens. I do see some grammar type errors. Also, I wasn't sure weather there was a brand name called "smooth"? or if you were just recommending IPower?
I think you should rewrite it, and make it more meaty and fix the wording errors. If I was just starting out looking for a gaming computer(which is a real possiblity) I wouldn't have gotten enough from that article, to come back and read it again, or go to any of your other lenses. You need people to stay on the page as long as possible, so they will look at your affiliate stuff that you are trying to sell. I usually only spend a long time, if the person has really given me some good concrete information. Are there maybe two more computers that you could also incorporate into the comparison? Don't mean to be negative. Good job on getting the first one up. Just one rewrite would make it stronger. Then people will want to flip to other things you have to say or sell.

And check to see if the lens name "Best Gaming Computer" is available. If it is, grab it and start building your reviews there. You want to fit your main keyword into the URL if you can get it.

And make sure you use the phrase Best Gaming Computer, not Best Gaming Computers. They're technically different keywords and there's a big difference in the numbers of searches (9900 per month for the first and 2400 per month for the second).

Well, "Best Gaming Computer" jumps off your Squidoo page for me.

I did a quick search on it at the Google Keyword Tool and it looks like 9900 people a month are searching for that keyword.

So you might want to focus on that for your keyword and create a lens reviewing the top 3 gaming computers.

You don't have to talk about the kinds of games people play because you're targetig gamers who want the "best gaming computer".

If I searched for that keyword, I'd want to know what makes a computer the best for gaming. Is it just a better graphics card?

The truth is people aren't looking for information. They're looking for advice. If someone searches for "best gaming computer", they want you to tell them which one is the best for gaming. They want you to give them a buying preference.

And if you've had a bad experience with Alienware, share that. It gives you a great story to share and they'll appreciate you steering them away from a brand that could give them a problem.

Thz Roy I was also was thinking of Alienware Computers But my experience with then is not a pleasant one. Although I should just throw that out the window and just take my pride to heart!! And as are keywords I might need alittle help on that as I am a newbie on what i am trying to target? Plus most gamer play all different kind of gamers!!

Hey, Jim ... I checked out your lens. What keywords are you targeting with it? And what segment of gamers are you aiming for?

If you're aiming for gamers with some cash to spend, you might want to mention Alienware computers. A friend of mine has an Alienware laptop and that thing is sick.

Looks pretty good to me. Simple, yet effective.