Posted My Second Post On New Site- Check It Out!
Last Update: February 08, 2014
Hello all,
I just posted my second post on my new site, and would really appreciate it if you could check it out and leave a comment.
http://workathomehow.com/what-is-making-money-online-all-about-how-you-can-get-in-on-it
Let me know what you think!
Thanks a ton
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Richie
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theholygrail
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Hey there Richie! Looking good. I see Bis has given you her expertise. She is awesome.
nomda ploom
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your style and referencing is great. It is now down to copy writing elements which have already been highlighted. You are then right on your game. Good job, Andy
BIS
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Hi Richie - Glad you're making progress with your new site.
Here's three things you may want to think about.
1. Headline - In my view this was is too long and cumbersome. Just try and keep them a bit shorter "What is making money all about?" would have been quite enough.
2. Put a caption on your image - something like "4.3 trillion sales made each year"
3. Making sure your content matches the headline. Your original headline says What is making money all about and how to get on it. I would say that you never actually answer the second part in your content. I know you have a link to what is going to be a WA affiliate page - but as a reader I feel cheated that I get no information on that page. :) Beverley
Here's three things you may want to think about.
1. Headline - In my view this was is too long and cumbersome. Just try and keep them a bit shorter "What is making money all about?" would have been quite enough.
2. Put a caption on your image - something like "4.3 trillion sales made each year"
3. Making sure your content matches the headline. Your original headline says What is making money all about and how to get on it. I would say that you never actually answer the second part in your content. I know you have a link to what is going to be a WA affiliate page - but as a reader I feel cheated that I get no information on that page. :) Beverley