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Hello, I am just starting my site and I wrote the Getting started post. I actually started this as the About Me page, but once I wrote it and seen how long it was, I though that it should be the "Getting Started" page. I would like some help and get your opinions. The link to the page is http://streamsofresidualincome.com/getting-started.

Please help me out and see if you think it needs changed, if it belongs in the "About Me" page, or if it is good how it is. I have not added photos yet, Also, I have a place for a link to WA, but I am not going to add it until I have more content on the site.

Thank you in advance for all your help.

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Hi Jeff

I went over to your website and the first thing I saw where all the "I"s. You are talking about you all the time. That works ONLY for your about page.
If the page is meant to speak to future customers you would need to make it about them.

If you put some photos in and a different formatting(so it becomes easier to read), it might go as an about page. But if you want to write all this I would suggest to write a short summary on top and then invite people to read more - if they want to.
Good luck!
Heidi

Hi Heidi,

Thank you for your help. I am going to rewrite and try again

Hi jeff, it is more of a get started article, you actually have put a review in there as well. You might take some of the material and put it into your about page as you also have some of that information mixed in.
The link "click here" to go to wealthy affiliate is not working so you need to fix that.
I know google sniper, and you know it, so why not write a review on it, you have used it, so this would be a good start for you.
These sort of programs are the ones to target as it has a residual income from a membership that is ongoing.
Can help further if you need it.
John

Thank you John for your help. I will move some of the information to the about me page. I like your idea of doing the review on Sniper, so I definitely will not scrap this article, but reorganize it. I will probably try again, hopefully I can get both the about me page and the getting started page done in a couple of days.

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