About me page done

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So ya i just finish my about me page what you guys think about it ? http://onlinebusinessopportunities.tk/about-me a comment in the site would be great :P give me some feed back thx

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That's an awesome about me page. Good job. The only thing I would change is the last link. When you say "here is a link to my profile", the link should really go to your profile. Instead of using your real affiliate link, you should use this link

https://my.wealthyaffiliate.com/jayskilzz

You'll still get credit when people visit that link and join. I've gotten some sales that way.

Oh i thought it was my profile page thank you jay i appreciate !

Hi!

Thank you for sharing your website with us and for asking for feedback.

I definitely like the passion you have in your writing and like the feel of your About Me page. You've done a great job of doing what Kyle taught about making readers feel as though there is a real person behind the website.

I know you said your English isn't really good. Although I think you've done a great job of already getting a good command of writing it, might I suggest finding someone, either here or where you live, that might edit your pages for you for correct English grammar and consistency after you've composed them? Not meant as a criticism, but I feel that readers will be able to better grasp content and meaning if everything is smooth and flowing. Let me know what you think?

Other than that, like I said, I love your "voice" and the passion you bring to the About Me page. As a writer I sometimes lose a little bit of that personality in my attempt to write technically well. I could learn a little something from you. :-)

Good luck and take care,
Heather

Thank you Heater And yes i will fix my grammar with with the program word :p I really appreciate your feed backs thx a lot !!

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