Am Idoing something wrong
I've had 65 clicks this week which has given me 12 referrals, but of the 15 referrals i have had not one of them has completed his/her profile page, the only problem I can see is that the automated referral letter all of which i've customised are not inserting the referrals name in the name field , so i have sent all of them a follow up letter asking them to complete their free account by writing something about themselves and posting a picture, bit so far none of them have complied - Am i doing something wrong below is a copy of the followup letter.
Dear Shirley
Welcome to Wealthy Affiliates University My name is Ray My Screen-name is Merryman88, I am the member who invited you to the free 7 day test drive, I don't know how you found my Website Twofreewebsitebonus.siterubix.com
but you have hit Gold
This is the best and only site that operates a free Test drive for 7 days, you wouldn't buy a car without a test drive? would you ? well that whats we think !! We have nothing to hide not like some of the other training Platforms.
Our membership is completely transparent absolutely No Hype, No Up-sells,
No BS, No Glittering Prizes, no Obligations, During the trial period you can use all the Tools,Resources, chat rooms, classes everything except the Members Personal message service ( that is available when you become a premium member) but everything else is available for you to try, you can ask other members questions.
Once you have completed your profile telling us something about yourself Posting your profile picture I suggest you start taking action by clicking on the getting started button in the members area.
There on the progress course lessons 1 through 10 you will learn to build your web sites by the end of the 3rd lesson you will have at least one site published and be on your way to a successful on- line business.
Become premium member within the 7 days test drive period and it will only cost you $19 for the next month then each month after will be $47 or if you wish to take advantage of the Heavily discounted yearly membership at $359 that's less than a $1 per day that's Value for you, Just remember Wealthy Affiliates is the best and the only organization of its Type on the internet , Honesty and Integrity are our watchwords and your success is our aim.
Once again Welcome and Enjoy your Journey with Wealthy Affiliates,
Ray Bowley ( Merryman88)
I cant see anything wrong with this letter, its not pushy or intimidating so what is wrong any suggestions please. I am at a complete loss
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I honestly can't help much as I do not have too much experience with this, but...
I would suggest that you clean up your letter a bit. I'm a stickler for English grammar and punctuation and one thing that I have noticed over and over and over from scam programs that I have bought into in the past is that very often, their English is not great.
Overall, your letter says it all, but I would fix up minor errors. Take out capitals where they shouldn't be, no spaces between punctuation marks, etc...
If you want help with this, feel free to PM me.
Cheers!
~ Stephanie
Thanks Stephanie
Not my strongest skills grammar and punctuation , but I have done what you suggested so it looks a bit cleaner now.
Ray Bowley ( Merryman88 )
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Hi Ray, If this is the first letter they receive from you, they would just feel that you are trying to sell them.
There's really no need to give them all those details about prices and discounts.
Just ask them what kind of help they need in building a site or making money.
Also point them to a few articles or trainings within WA that could help them reach their goals.
If they like the trainings and articles, they will be searching for the discounts and the special WA offer themselves. Maybe they will even ask you about it.
Just my 2 cents.
Faraz
Hi Faraz,
Thanks for the advice, I will try your approach I think , I have wondered if I have been frightening them off. Let you know hoq I grt on.
Ray Bowley