Finished website comments
Hi all
I have just finished my website on whiter teeth and i would like an honest critique on it with comments. I know you all hate the dentist, I know that but beyond that. How does it look, how does it read. Any ideas on monetising. i am waiting for the affiliate window approval to add my boots banner but please be somewhat harsh. I am tough and wont cry....much
http://whitestteeth.siterubix.com
MikeyB
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I have reviewed your website and I found it informative. I have also read the other comments and disagree on some of them. However I am a newbie here and haven't published any page.
Ah yes that looks better. I need to take a closer look too, my pegs have always been yellow. I wouldn't want to look like Kim Kardashian or anything - actually that's hardly likely to happen - but I wouldn't mind some improvement
I liked it. I know so much more about teeth whitening now. I like your writing style too, very relaxed and informative. I spotted a couple of typos, a missing word and site/sight. Sorry I'm picky like that. Had a really good browse around, excellent!
I would leave a reply to the comment on the first page, although it's not a direct question it looks as if you have ignored him.
Interesting, maybe awaiting moderation? I remember seeing something in WP about this. I think there's a setting somewhere that allows you to moderate (approve) comments before they are published (visible).
My connection is painfully slow today but I'll take a look later unless somebody else can point us in the right direction?
You add humour to the content. Very interesting. You can create your own banner and add link into it. As for WA banner is optional as it not related to the content. Which I will be removing mine on my site. When I start to promote WA I will put up on the new site.
I can't wait to get my teeth to be whiten. :)
Hi doc. I looked at it and like it and would help if I could most of what I know you did it right --as for as I can. I would ask the owners Carson and Kyle to take a look. The one thing I have been told when monetizing the website to look for affiliate program that will return yo bigger sales like $50 and up. That Amazon is low commissions. I am not the person to listen to and don't make any changes due to me. I want to reply to you to encourage you, hope in some small way I did!!!!!
I listen and accept all criticism Ed. Amazon is low, i am loking and waiting for Boots to see about some products but not a lot to sell with this one. A bit of a practice site really. Just want to know if it 'pleases the eye'....Much appreciated thank you and remember 'you know more than you think you know'
Great start, takes time to build the content, but the site is good, clear and answers all the questions that people will ask, always feels good when you eventualy get your first site ready for action. Good Luck
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Mike, I am a rookie here, but i would change your order of paragraphs at the end of your about me section.
Now it reads: " I hope my thoughts were correct and that this site helps you."
Whitening your teeth is an important and exciting prospect but I want you all to be aware of the pitfalls before losing a lot of money in your dentist’s chair.
I would keep the whitening your teeth paragraph as is and then say, " I know or I trust my website will help you. It is much more positive and obviously you "know" what you are talking about as you are the expert. In the beginning you use the word maybe several times. Possibly change it to "perhaps once". I use to have a very picky boss and if I repeated a word more than 2 times, it bugged him. I use to get irritated at him but I also became a better writer.
Hope this helps!
excellent points, thank you so much, I have been married twice so used to picky. thank you for your attention....Much appreciated,