HELP, I need Landing Page Input!

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Greetings Wealthy Affiliates!

I need some website review for a new business launch! I have a simple landing page at Help Starting a Small Business. I would appreciate visits to the site and a review of the content. It is a very small and concise site that will be found through targeted PPC advertising. We are marketing in the southeast United States first, as our test region, but the business is running nationally.

We are targeting the individual in the 35-54 year old demographic that is looking for a low investment startup cost to get a new business rolling.

I would appreciate any comments on the video and text! I will of course do the same if you direct me to your needs!

Thanks in Advance!!

Howard

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I agree with Jen....make your audience feel like they are sitting there talking to you...ask and answer expected questions (even using a FAQ format, if need be)...it is a very well-made video....once you have 'grabbed' audience attention, show them the way as a friend would do...not a salesperson...?????

Thanks Rosie!

Hey Howard,

Truly a great simple page! Shall I give my most infamous critic? Can you take it?

First question as header is fine! Second one, hmm, what if I would not like any of it at all.. boom... I'm out!

Next questions gave me another hmmm.. what if all my answer is a NO... boom, I'm out again...

The video clip is really great! Quite good quality. Well done!

First para of your copy after the video -- we... we... we... we believe this/that... we... again.

Next paragraphs are fine.

Overall, I do smell something fishy... (if I were a stranger, ok?) -- it's like someone who goes for the money only for his/her own benefits without really understanding the needs of the audience who may turn out to be a great future prospect.

I shall say, please work on the copy, Howard. It's a good simple and readable - what you have right now but if you can go deep inside your audience's mind, that might do another wonder. Try it please.

Sorry about my hardcore review 'coz I'm doing this to myself too. Been trying to work on my own copy and none seems to work YET! All the best. Thanks for sharing your company's site. Happy New Year.

Jenn

p.s. Copy as in copywriting...

Thanks Jenn! That's what I need to hear! The funny thing is we really do care! I guess I really have not expressed it yet.

My pleasure.
Talk to them... use you instead of the general 3rd person or I/We. They want to know what YOU can give them. :) Buzz me if you have a rewrite. :)

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